Thursday, December 5, 2013

NaNoWriMo, hot donkeys and Lego-ized Blues Brothers

A friend was displaying this quote on Facebook and I took the trouble to find out more:

"She had an unnecessarily loud voice, a bit of a bray, like some enchanted, hot donkey."

It is apparently from Gone Girl and this website used it in describing how to write emotions and feelings.
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In the mall Chase Scene from the Blues Brothers. This link include the chase scene, a side-by-side comparison of the original and the Lego version and a 12 minute 'Making of-" video that looks like it will be useful for my son and I in our more-minor attempts at stop motion.
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My son has written a story:
*Cheetahs vs Leopards


It was a hot day in kenya. A cheetah named Albert spotted a impala.  He called Jacob, his assistant. Then the leopard named Carson spotted the impala. Now He called his assistant. Then they both chased the impala. They were just too noisy for the impala. King Albert blamed king Carson. King Carson blamed king Albert.


They got so tired of arguing that they fought for that delicious impala. Bryson, Carson's assistant clawed Phil the cheetah. Phil was really hurt. He had to stop the job. Everybody was sad. Carson called Tyson. Albert called Colin. They told Tyson and Colin, “Come help.”Colin arrived in a FLASH. Then colin did a 360 kick . He kicked Madelaine the leopard right in the stomach. Madelaine and Phil both needed to go to the hospital.

Albert just grabbed Bryson and threw Bryson in to Carson. Now Bryson threw Bob the cheetah in to Jacob but, Jacob escaped the throw. Bob landed on the ground really fast. It was a night a very quiet night.They were all sleeping except Albert. He was walking around his house trying to think about something. Next morning He told Carson we could share the impala. Carson thought that was a good idea. And they shared the impala.
See the next adventure that Albert does!

the end!
After I finished my InNoWriMo sory, my son wanted to attempt something smaller but still significant.  He chose the huge goal of three thousand words in a month. He made a hundred and five yesterday and finished his first story an hour ago.  He is still set on making 3000 words and is now at 220 in two days but has decided to make a book of several distinct adventures rather than one long story.  The lead character originally had his own name but I have changed it to 'Albert'.

He would love comments and has asked me to post his story so he can get responses.  A wonderfully naive boy, he believes his father is popular online.

4 comments:

janet lanaus said...

Of course he would think dad is popular. You are his role model and good for you brian
The story is good. Hope he can attain his goal.

Gordon Bazsali, Jr. said...

I really enjoyed the story. It made me hungry for impala, but my store didn't have any. Oh well.
Keep up the great writing! Your goal of 3000 words is a good goal. If you sick to it, you will feel GREAT when you accomplish it.

brian dean said...

Thanks, Jan and Gordon.

Gordon, your own goal is nearly complete. How tough has it been?

vp said...

It's funny that Gordon comnented because I thought of him when I read about the impala because that reminded me of a cool band called Tame Impala, and I always imagine Gordon in that band.
Good goal for your son, Brian.
Btw, that was my status. I'm just a little less famous than you, by extension.